For comparison, here's draft 2 (well, that's my numbering, Chris's are different)
And now, here's the new one:
Lost a bit of that gorgeous golden light, but in compensation, we have a lot more river, with perspectives, and distance, and really beautiful mother-of-pearl effects near Tellurith.
I think, now I see them together, that I like the tones and glow in the second draft, but otoh, this IS a story about a River, and a river journey, and the new one has river, oh, yes, indeed it does.
So, comments definitely suggested on this one. What does everyone think?